♪ Good morning to a brand new day ♪ ♪ Time to learn and games to play ♪ ♪ Learning things is so much fun ♪ ♪ Learning is good for everyone ♪ (upbeat music) - Good morning 3rd graders.

My name is Mrs. Nix, and I am so excited to be here with you to support you as you become amazing thinkers, readers, and writers.

Now this week, it's a little bit different, right?

We're working all about, learning all about the writing process, and what we're doing to help us learn about that writing process is we're writing a book review.

Now in order to write a book review, what do we have to do first?

That's right, we need to read a book.

So where can we find books?

We can check them out from our local county libraries, our school libraries, or we can go online and use the app Sora and check it out for free here in Presley Unified, so I encourage you, find a book, and then I want you to really think about, did you like it, did you not, and why?

And we're going to talk about that a little bit more today.

Now, to get us started, we're gonna warm up our brains looking at some high frequency words and then we're gonna jump into a little bit of grammar and then get into that writing process.

Today we're on revise, so we'll talk about that when we get to it, are you ready to start?

Okay, let's look at these high frequency words.

Now holy smokes, there's a ton of them up here, right?

Remember, this is a review week.

These words, you've already done them with me.

We've been working on these the last five weeks.

Today we're going to read 10 of them to warm up our brains and get us started for today, but look at all this hard work that you've been doing.

I'm so proud of you.

Now, if you read something today and you think to yourself, you know what, I could use a little more practice with that, is that okay?

Yes, absolutely.

Write it down, put it on a Post-it note, practice it, make up some sentences.

The more you use it, the better you're gonna be at...

The better at remembering it.

Okay, let's get started warming up those brains.

Here we go, we've got there, their, then, them, these, they, things, think, this, and those.

Oh my goodness, so many of those words we've been practicing, great job, 3rd grade.

So today we're going to start out with a little bit of grammar.

Now, pronouns are super important.

We've talked about them the last couple of days.

They're the words that make it so that our sentences are more interesting to read.

We don't always want to say Mrs. Nix was teaching the class.

Mrs. Nix called on a student.

Mrs. Nix, ugh.

It gets so boring to listen to that all the time.

That's where pronouns come in, and they can replace the noun with a pronoun.

Okay, so we have some rules, though, that we have to follow, so let's talk about some of them.

One of them is this.

Do not add an S or an ES to a present tense action verb when using plural pronouns, try saying that three times fast, we, you, and they.

Okay, here's an example.

Do they want a garden at your house?

Look right here, we're not gonna say wants because that wouldn't make sense, we're not adding S or ES.

Do they want a garden at your house?

Okay, here's another time we don't add an S. We don't add S to singular pronouns I and you, so after I and you, so for example, you know how to plant seeds too.

We don't say you knows how to plant seeds too, we say you know.

Okay, let's practice it just a little bit down here.

So we have like and likes.

When we have the word we, this is a plural pronoun, we know we're talking about more, so we, are we gonna add an S?

We can even just look up here, right?

We're not adding an S, so we know that it's gonna say we like, we like helping mom with our garden.

We don't say we likes helping mom with the garden, and I even started writing likes, oh my goodness.

We like helping mom with the garden.

Okay, she is a singular pronoun, so let's practice it, now we're gonna add the S. She grows, she grows lettuce, tomatoes, and cucumbers.

Do you see that?

Now we have I, what was our rule?

Oh, it's up here, so I, we're not gonna add the S to our verb, so let's look, I help, I help pull the weeds and my brother waters.

Okay, last one, he.

Now he is singular, but he's not up here on our list, so he, we're gonna add that S, he knows how to plant seeds too.

So he knows how to plant seeds too.

Again, practice, practice, practice with those pronouns, because they're gonna help your writing become so much more interesting.

Okay, today we're talking about a book review.

So what is a book review?

Let's talk about it.

I've got a poster over here.

A book review states the writer's opinion about a book, provides a short summary of the book, gives clear reasons that support the writer's opinion, and then at the end it ends with a recommendation to the reader.

Should they read it, should they not read it?

Okay, so this week we have been practicing this writing process, and I want to talk about it and do a little out of order today because we've been going through and we've been writing our own book review, and we're learning about it by looking at a model, but today I just want to point out right here, so today we're on revise.

On Monday we talked about planning, Tuesday, yesterday, you should have started to get that rough draft written.

Remember, it can be messy and have scribbles all over it, it's no big deal, take your time, make it make sense.

Today is the day that we can go back and revise.

I'm gonna show you using that model again how to revise and then we'll talk about some of the steps that you can take to revise your own writing, so let's look at the model that we did from yesterday.

So here it is, remember?

Messy, handwriting's all over the place, we've got scribbly marks everywhere, and is that a problem?

No, this is our first draft.

Today we're gonna go through, we're gonna revise, I'm gonna take out my green pen today so that we can start to do a little revision, okay.

So just to kind of remind ourselves some of the things, I'm gonna start out here at the top and I'm gonna talk to you about some changes that we might make, some revisions that we could do right here.

So "Antarctica: Life in the Cold".

I just finished reading "Antarctica: Life in the Cold", a book about wildlife in the Arctic.

I usually enjoy learning new things.

I did not like reading this book.

I'm gonna stop right there, because I really feel like we could combine these two sentences together.

I usually enjoy learning new things, but I didn't like reading this book, and I think we can do that simply by adding a comma and the word but, I did not like reading this book.

It makes the sentence flow together better, right?

Okay, so let's keep going just a little bit more.

I did not like reading this book.

Its writer discussed many interesting animals.

He did not go into much detail.

Again, how can we make these two sentences go together a little bit better, flow a little bit better?

I was thinking about, what if we added the world while?

While its writer discussed many interesting animals, he, and we could make that all together, so take out the period, just put a comma, he did not go into much detail about many of them.

Okay, so he discussed many interesting things, he didn't go into much detail, so that wasn't very helpful.

All right, in the same place, in some places, the writing is very repetitive and boring.

Okay, remember we talked about making sure that we have some ways that we are including some linking words, right?

So I was thinking about, look at all of these paragraphs that we have here, that's a great opportunity to put some linking verbs.

First, then, next, so what if we put that right here?

What if we start with first, 'cause we're gonna give many reasons, right, why we didn't enjoy the book?

So we could say first, the writer talks about penguins.

This is that summary piece, so if I did first right there, what do you think I would use on my second paragraph?

How about next?

See how easy that is?

That's an easy fix that I can go back and do and it connects my paragraphs so that they make sense.

Okay, I did find one other little error in the middle of my paragraph right here, and it comes down here.

So remember he gives a summary of penguins, but I really like this part here, and I'm gonna start at the sentence that's right before this one, and I'm gonna say right here, he does not provide enough information about the penguins.

He does not tell how penguins can swim, how they can catch fish, or about dangers that they face.

So this is some examples of how he's not providing enough information, could we include just this little phrase, for example?

And it lets the reader know, hey, I'm gonna start telling you some examples.

So it's okay to say that, right, in your writing.

For example, he doesn't do these things.

It's a great way to organize your writing.

Okay, when we flip over, and again I'm skipping right ahead to all of our different pieces.

But I had our very last paragraph that's right here, just has a finally, and I love that we can have that in there, so that is perfect, and I'm gonna stop there because tomorrow we'll talk about some of the editing pieces.

Today, as you start to go back and talk about your piece and how to revise your piece, here are some things to keep in mind, so you might want to write these down.

Okay, revising your draft.

Here are the pieces.

Make sure you're adding details and information to make it clear, remove distracting or unnecessary ideas, replace bland or overused words, you don't want to be repetitious and boring, right?

Rearrange your phrases or sentences so that they are more clear for the reader.

Use those linking words and phrases.

But, while, because, therefore, for example.

And then go through and have a friend look over your information.

Maybe they're gonna ask you things like what do you like about your writing and what might you change, and then at the end after reading it they might even ask you what else would they like to know about?

Great thing that they would be able to use, and I'm just gonna put it up here as I know we're closing out today, but you could use a checklist.

Checklists are great, they're gonna help keep you organized as to what you're looking for.

So, 3rd grade, I just want to say thank you so much for hanging out with me today as you're getting ready for school, and remember, you are responsible for your learning success, so listen, ask questions, and share your ideas, because together we can do so much more.

I'm so excited to see and hear about all of the writing that you're doing, the books that you've been reading, and don't hesitate to share them with me, I'd love to hear about them.

All right, have a great afternoon, I look forward to seeing you back here at PBS tomorrow.

Take care, bye bye.

(upbeat guitar music) ♪ Good morning to a brand new day ♪ ♪ Time to learn and games to play ♪ ♪ Learning things is so much fun ♪ ♪ Learning is good for everyone ♪