
2-364: Using the “Revise & Edit” of Writing Process
Season 3 Episode 358 | 14m 16sVideo has Closed Captions
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2-364: Using the “Revise & Edit” of Writing Process
Season 3 Episode 358 | 14m 16sVideo has Closed Captions
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Learn Moreabout PBS online sponsorship♪ Good morning to a brand new day ♪ ♪ Time to learn and the games to play ♪ ♪ Learning things is so much fun ♪ ♪ Learning is good for everyone ♪ (upbeat music) - Dragons eat noodles on Tuesdays, did you know that?
Good thing today is not Tuesday.
Happy Thursday, boys and girls.
Welcome back to our PBS classroom.
My name is Mrs. Vang and I'm so excited to have you join me so that we can become amazing readers and writers.
Now, remember all of the books this week was recommended by Ms. Parker, the librarian at Piles.
So thank you Ms. Parker for recommending these books for me to share with all of the boys and girls at home or in the classroom watching.
And boys and girls, I got to say this book was a hilarious book to read.
So if you wanna read a funny book, make sure you are checking out Dragons Eat Noodles on Tuesday by John Stahl illustrated by Tadgh Bently.
Now remember, I said that if you check out a book and it has a book jacket, a lot of the time it's gonna have a little summary or what it's going to be about, or texts from the book on the book jacket.
And sometimes that's gonna determine if you wanna read the whole book.
And so this one says, once upon a time, begins the big blue monster who was trying to tell a fabulous story.
It needs to be about a kid who is eaten by a dragon, he insists, but his little yellow monster friend is not convinced that this is a good idea, Jack and stories, it's usually don't end well, he warns.
As the two monsters argue over how the story should go, a hungry dragon named Dennis is listening nearby.
Dennis knows exactly how the story should go.
And by the way, what day is it?
Watch out.
Now, doesn't that seem interesting?
That's what got me hooked into wanting to read this book.
And so that's why I read it.
So if you wanna read Dragons Eat Noodles on Tuesdays, you can check to see if this book is available on Sora, if you have the Sora app, at a county library or at your school library, especially if you go to Pile it's gonna be there next week when I return this book, okay?
All right, boys and girls.
Now, don't forget, some of you guys are becoming amazing readers and writers.
Don't forget you can also write to me here in our PBS classroom.
Use the address that you see below, tell me all that you're learning, tell me all that you're reading.
And I can't wait to get your letters so I can read what you guys have written me.
Or if you just want to write me a story, I would love that also.
And if you include your home address or your return address, I'll send you one of these fun activity books.
So if you don't have one, that's how you get one.
You just have to write a letter to me.
So I'll be waiting to receive your letters.
All right?
Awesome.
Okay, boys and girls let's get started with our learning today.
Now remember, all week we're gonna be focusing on our grammar, mechanics and journal writing, which is explanatory essay.
So today for grammar, we're gonna focus on contractions.
For our mechanic lessons, we're gonna be focusing on our possessive pronouns.
And then we'll go into our explanatory essay which today we're gonna be revising and editing.
So remember we wrote our draft yesterday, today we're gonna revise and edit to make it sound and flow better, okay?
So let's get started with our grammar for today.
Now, today we're gonna focus on a contraction and we've already learned this.
So this is a review for us, okay?
A contraction is a what?
Is a short form of two words.
Remember, it's two words.
And I like to say, we crashed them together.
And when we do that, we lose some letters and we put in?
Good job, a what?
Apostrophe to put those two words together because we've lost some letters.
So for example, I am is?
We do with me, I'm, good.
She is?
She's, good.
He is?
He's.
It is?
It's, good job keep reading with me.
They are becomes they're, good.
We are becomes we're, good.
You are becomes you're, good job boys and girls.
You guys remember this, awesome.
Now, let's practice.
Let's see if you guys can put these words, these twos short words into contractions.
Ready?
It says, I am thinking about earth.
What are my two words?
I am.
How do I make I am into a contraction?
Good job, I hear you, I'm.
Check it, does yours look like mine?
Awesome.
And don't forget if you have a paper nearby or a whiteboard, make sure you take it out so that you are following along with me.
Okay, let's keep going.
She is worried about resources.
What are my two words?
She is.
Now without looking at the chart in the top, can you tell me the contraction for she is?
Good job, I heard you, she's.
Put the apostrophe because we are missing the I.
She's, good job.
Check it, good.
Let keep going.
They are trying to collect old papers.
What is the contraction for they are?
Good job, I heard you.
They're, apostrophe.
Good, check it.
Thumbs up, I see you, good job.
Let's keep going.
I think that you are very helpful.
Here are my two small words, you are.
So instead of saying, I think that you are, I can say, I think that you're, good job.
You're very helpful.
So you see how I can replace you are with you're and it still makes sense?
That's why it's a contraction, it's a shortened way to write two words.
Good job, boys and girls.
So as you're writing, make sure that your contractions are written correctly.
Okay, now let's go into our mechanics.
And this or today we're gonna be focusing on possessive nouns.
Remember we learned that yesterday, possessive or let me say that again, a possessive pronoun.
We're gonna be learning possessive pronouns.
Now, yesterday we did learn possessive pronouns and we know that they take the place of a possessive noun.
But today we're just gonna work with the words their, your, and its because those are not contractions and it's tricky because their, your, and its gets misused all the time.
So, let's quickly go over some of these, what I call rules for these possessive pronouns.
So remember, a possessive pronoun tells who or what has or owns something, right?
And do not confuse possessive pronouns with contractions, right?
That's where it becomes tricky because they sound the same.
Because they sound the same, but they are spelled differently and they have different meanings.
So this is why a lot of people get confused.
So here are my possessive pronouns, their, your, and its, right?
That's what we're learning today.
But they're, T-H-E-Y-'-R-E is the contraction for they are.
But you see they sound the same there, their and they're.
Your, again possessive pronoun, but you're which is the contraction for you are, sounds the same, right?
Its an it's sounds the same but this its with no apostrophe, possessive pronoun.
It's with the apostrophe S is a contraction, not a possessive pronoun.
So I have these two little charts here to help us, okay?
For your, cause your shows ownership because it's a possessive pronoun, here's a trick, if you put the word my in it and it still makes sense, then it's a possessive pronoun.
If you put the two words, you are in place of you're and it makes sense, then it's the contraction not the possessive pronoun, okay?
Just little tricks to help you.
And there, their, they're.
Those are the tricky.
These are what we call those tricky homophones.
Just a little trick, their has an I so it looks like a person, that means it belongs to something.
They're, again it's a contraction.
So change it and if you can say they are in a sentence, then it's the contraction.
So let's practice, ready?
They're making posters.
So remember that check change it to they are.
They are making posters.
Does that make sense?
Yes.
Their as in a person, making poster.
So which one is it?
Their making posters or they are making posters?
They're, they are.
They're making posts posters.
Cause it's not their posters.
If it's their posters, then it will be the possessive pronouns.
All right now.
Let's keep going, you guys are doing good.
You're poster is about saving water.
So you're, as in you are poster is about saving water.
That's the contraction or your poster.
And I remember that trick, change it to my.
My poster is about saving water.
That makes sense.
So it's a possessive pronoun.
You see that?
Last one, it's a very colorful poster.
Okay.
So it is a very colorful poster or it's as in it belongs to someone, a very colorful poster.
What is it?
It is, it's a contraction.
How did you guys do?
Those are tricky, boys and girls.
So as you're writing, make sure you guys are checking to make sure you're putting the possessive pronouns if it belongs to someone or contraction if you can break it apart into two words.
All right?
Okay, let's go into our explanatory essay, okay?
So remember, explanatory essay explains the topic clearly.
It provides facts and definitions related to the topic.
It's gonna use linking words and connect ideas.
We're gonna end with a concluding sentence or section.
We started with our draft, right?
Getting all of our ideas out.
Lisa wrote her draft.
Sorry, that was her pre-writing.
She wrote her draft from her graphic organizer.
Today, we are gonna be focusing on our revising and editing.
So we're gonna read to make sure that it makes sense.
We're going to add, remove or change and we're going to fix errors, fix capitalization and punctuation.
So that's why we need a green or a red depending on what we are doing, okay?
So I always like to revise first.
So I'm gonna get my green to help me revise, okay?
So remember, we're just checking to see if our writing makes sense.
So, as I was reading this with Lisa, I noticed that she had all of our writing in this.
She had the sentence that she says, on green roofs special materials is placed over the regular roof.
Then soil is put on top, plants are added.
And then she says, I think flowers are the best plants for green roofs.
Now, does that sentence go with her story?
Or now to her essay?
It doesn't because she's writing, I think, okay?
It shouldn't be needed that you think because it's a factual essay, right?
It's all based on facts and details, right?
So another thing, so as I'm reading with her, I was thinking, okay, so she was talking about the benefits and then she said something about people can add beehives.
Does that have anything to do with adding?
I mean, having benefits?
No.
So I told her, you know, maybe we can delete this sentence cause it doesn't make sense, okay?
And then I said, well, up here and I forgot, we were going up here, and then she said there's roof with many benefits.
And then she started giving me all the examples.
So I said, let's add the word for example.
You see how I'm gonna to add to it so that it makes sense?
All right.
And so, as I was reading with her, remember we read this yesterday, I went, you know what, this was my good concluding sentence.
Let's add in another sentence here to talk about, remember cause she's talked about in her draft, something about the environment, how it gives animals a place to live.
So we're gonna add some sentence there so that makes sense, okay?
And then tomorrow we're focused on the editing and then we'll go to our publishing which is the final draft.
So don't forget to come back because we did quite finish with our revising and editing, but, at home make sure you guys are getting a green.
If you have one, a green color pencil, or marker and revise.
Check and have an adult help you reread to make sure it makes sense.
All right, you're doing such a great job.
Have a great day learning.
I'll see you tomorrow.
Bye bye.
(upbeat music) ♪ Good morning to a brand new day ♪ ♪ Time to learn and games to play ♪ ♪ Learning things is so much fun ♪ ♪ Learning is good for everyone ♪ (upbeat music)
Reading Explorers is a local public television program presented by Valley PBS